produce a 1500 word essay reflecting on the interactions between adults and children in relation to the promotion of learning in two specific areas of development.

“For this assignment you were asked to produce a 1500 word essay reflecting on the interactions between adults and children in relation to the promotion of learning in two specific areas of development. I can see in this essay that you have drawn on a wide range of sources to inform your writing although I cannot see any reference to the core text. The texts that you’ve used have been referenced accurately using the Harvard referencing system. You have used appropriate theory for cognitive development by drawing on the work of Piaget and Vygotsky. In relation to Piaget you have talked about schema’s which are commonly used to describe patterns of behaviour, but I cannot see a link between what you have written about this and the two observations you have included. For example, when the child was playing in the garden did you see any patterns in what he/she was doing? You may remember the video we watched on the little boy playing in the garden developing his  trajectory schema in a range of ways. Similarly with Vygotsky, I cannot link what you have said about the child or the practiotners role to your observations. The observations are quite brief and I think that these have not given you sufficient information to analyse in your essay, as there is little detail on the cognitive or physical skills that the child displayed. For example, you mention the child drawing – how did they hold the pencil, what movements did they make on the paper? How does this link physical development milestones/theory and what did the practitioner do to promote learning? The only mention you have made of the practitioners role is that of risk assessing the area, which of course is essential but does not relate to what you were being asked to do in this essay. Unfortunately, therefore, I do not feel that you have provided sufficient evidence to meet the requirements of this assessments at this stage and you will therefore be offered a resit.” Please improve it as mush as you like as long as it is meeting the criteria